Comments on: 破晓 https://oldblog.orzfly.com/html/daybreak.html His Memories from Here to There, with Fuzzy Ginkgo Fri, 18 Jul 2014 13:29:18 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=4.9.5 By: 沈钰伟 https://oldblog.orzfly.com/html/daybreak.html#comment-452 Sat, 23 Oct 2010 16:02:46 +0000 http://orzfly.com/?p=489#comment-452 全文描写了多种声音,运用了比喻,拟人,排比等修辞手法,语句通顺,平易近人,但主要声音“雨声”不够突出,其他声音似乎有些喧宾夺主。

仅代表个人意见,不代表众人之见。

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